Memoirs of Mr. Perfect : Story by Shagun Kesar in Crush 2 published by Authors' Ink Publications

REVIEW

When the age of adolescence is overwhelmed by sex hormones, either in a male or in a female, they are supposed to be attracted towards their opposites. And that is so natural that we all had had an experience of this during our teenage while in school. Yet, not all of us are capable to describe our crush in the form of a story. And I would like to congratulate Shagun Kesar for penning a story which the reader will find relating to one and all.

Merits:
The feelings of a shy and introvert teenage girl which she endures for a senior student of her college have been put forward in an unabated flow.

Lines I liked:
"She was my treasure box in which I could endure all my secrets knowing that they will remain safe."

Demerits:

However the flow of the story is smooth, long paragraphs and lack of dialogues kill the enjoyment of reading. Enough work is required on maintaining the narration-conversation-balance. Moreover, the story is so simple without nil twists and turns that the reader develops an apathy towards the end.

Anyways, some stories are really so simple!

The tag line of the story suggests some flaw in the boy, the title suggests that he's flawless. Both are antagonizing to each other. And even after reading the story a couple of times I failed to spot the flaw in the boy. Perhaps the flaw was in the girl as I could understand from the tagline which has become quite ambiguous while trying to write a catchy one. I, with due apology, would like to suggest the writer to refrain from making such ambiguous headings.
The story is all about the memoirs of the girl, in the first person, not of the boy. It needs to be corrected as at present it is confusing.

Ratings : 2.5/5
Shagun Kesar is quite a young writer and expecting a flawless write-up from her will not be justified. Moreover, nobody is perfect either. She has great potential and has to go a long way.
Best of luck!

Rajeev Pundir

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Way Beyond Just Memories: Story by Bhumika Khatri in Crush 2 Published by Authors' Ink Publications

REVIEW:

When she opened her accounts text book, a paper contained in between the pages fell from it. She lifted it with trembling hands and unfolded with mighty heart--pounding and scared! What would have happened before and after that, read the painful story Beyond Just Memories by Bhumika Khatri in Crush 2.

Merits:
The story explores the dark side of human inter-personal relations right from teenage. It tells us that sometimes what we see and form an opinion about a person may be wrong. The person seeming to be happy-go-lucky on face-value may actually be a victim of his bad circumstances at home and quite sad within. Hence we should take utmost care in understanding others. The writer has been successful in portraying the theme of the story.

Lines I liked:

"You are the most beautiful thing that has happened to me, and I am blessed to have known you and be loved by you."

Demerits:
Yes it's true that teenage is the most sensitive and vulnerable to extreme steps like committing suicide, yet it's never been an easy option for anyone to take such a hard decision like embracing death so early that too when Ritik had found his love as depicted in the above lines. It seems that the writer wanted to glorify the darkest aspect of life that too at a stage when one doesn't have enough experience of life. We as a writer have some responsibility towards our society and should refrain from highlighting such extreme emotions which may influence other young ones to imitate the same; courtesy the fickleness of their mind, until and unless it's not only hundred percent but two hundred percent justified and required by the story. I'm afraid, here in this story it was not justified.

Since the date and time of the story is not mentioned, the readers may find the reference of Orkut obsolete.

Sorry for my adverse comments.

Ratings: 2/5

Bhumika, you're the second one I have found proclaiming a vagabond for oneself. First one is me. I liked it. You're doing a course of journalism and some how seemed to be influenced by the sensationalism of this profession. Please don't mix the two and as I've found, you have a great potential as a writer, I suggest you to write your heart, not your mind.
Without malice, I've given my honest review and I wish you all the best as a story-teller.

Rajeev Pundir 

Star Crossed : Story by Akash Rumade in Crush 2 Published by Authors' Ink Publication

REVIEW:

Sometimes when somebody wants to correct us, we take it otherwise. But after years are gone, when we realize that the person was right in correcting our wrongdoings, selflessly, we repent and develop a respect and liking for her/him. This is an excellent story you must read to know more written by Akash Rumade.

Merits: The story is successfully told in present and the past in flashbacks. The mistakes made by the boy, Karan, his brazenness, the girl's rebukes and her bold steps to correct him, all have been narrated in the author's unique style. You'll love it.

Lines I liked:

"Yet again, he lay in his bed, staring at the ceiling like some artist mulling over a blank canvas."

New words I learnt: Solipsistic, Maquillage

Demerits: The subject of this story is different from the theme of the book and people having a penchant for romantic love stories, crush, hard and soft feelings and emotions etc.will find it dry and may turn the pages.

Ratings: 3.5/5
Akash, I congratulate you  to put down such a hard-hitting fable fabulously comprising repentance and introspection by the protagonist in your unique style. Keep it up!
I wish you all the best and would love to read more from your desk.

Rajeev Pundir

Resonance Of Love: Story by Pooja Khurana in Crush 2 published by Authors' Ink Publications

REVIEW:

This story is about the innocent love of a girl for a boy who's not as perfect as we find in other stories. The girl develops soft feelings for that boy when he's admitted to her school in her class. And the story compels you to read further to know the future of this childhood crush.

Merits:
People are known to fall for the most beautiful, deserving, successful, intelligent and extra-ordinary human beings. That's natural. But here's a story, straight from the innocence of childhood, so different and so pure at heart that you start loving the writer for writing such a wonderful story where an innocent girl, as young as in seventh grade, develops tender feelings for a boy who's very good at heart but imperfect. Seldom we see such stories. Bold and brave attempt by the writer and I congratulate her for the same.

Lines I liked: "I was on the verge of crying. Ominous clouds have gathered and tears were lurking nearby. I could sense it"

Demerits: The balance of narration and conversation is to be looked upon. Nothing much.
Ratings: 4/5

The brief bio of the writer discloses her to be multi-talented. I wish good luck for her waiting for more from her creative mind.

Rajeev Pundir

Crush= Life-Story by Anuj Singhal in Crush 2 Published by Authors' Ink Publications

REVIEW:

When Hunar Aggarwal falls for the most sought after beauty of his college Amira, his attendance in his class increases to almost never-miss and as a result something interesting happens in his life. To know more how does his crush for Amira affected his life as a whole, read this all-good story by Anuj Singhal which will oblige you to trust in your love.

Merits:
The story runs in a simple linear fashion like a river flows in winters; slow and steadily. The incidents from initiation of the session to the farewell have been narrated step-by-step laced with the emotions of the boy for his crush gradually changing into more and more intense with the passage of time. Good work. The end of the story surprises the readers making them happy for both the characters.

Lines I liked: "Stories never end, Antara. They continue for life long."

Demerits:
The simplicity of the story. Would have been better to include some other colors, some bitter sweet memories for making it more compelling.
However, we see that certain stories are like that only.

Ratings: 3/5
Anuj is a writer and published a novel already-Was It A Murder?
I look forward for a lot from his creative mind and I wish all the best for his literary endeavor he's capable of.
Rajeev Pundir

School Crush- Story by Chandra Kant Jaisansaria in Crush 2

REVIEW

She entered the class with heavenly smile and dimples on her soft rosy cheeks.
These compelling lines tells the story of a boy, as young as a seventh-class student, who instantly falls for the girl, a new admission in his class. What happens next, read the story School Crush in Crush 2 by C K.

Merits:
The way the story has been narrated is so natural and flows into the pages so silently with intermittent intoxicating humming melody, that the reader is lost into it sheerly, as if it's his/her own story. Actually, such a crush happens with all of us--either agree or disagree and I give full marks to CK for penning it so beautifully, specially the boy's waiting outside her house to have a glimpse of his crush Priya.

Lines caught my heart:
"Her handwriting was something like a masterpiece or you can say her pen was a butterfly which spread the colors in her notebook."
Fantastic!

Demerits:
The title of this story is grammatically confusing. To make it clear, it should have been, "School-time Crush". Nothing more except a few typos.

Ratings: 4/5

The writer has a great potential of becoming a compelling writer. I look forward for more interesting stories from his heart spilling over the pages through his pen.  All the best!

Rajeev Pundir