REVIEW
When the age of adolescence is overwhelmed by sex hormones, either in a male or in a female, they are supposed to be attracted towards their opposites. And that is so natural that we all had had an experience of this during our teenage while in school. Yet, not all of us are capable to describe our crush in the form of a story. And I would like to congratulate Shagun Kesar for penning a story which the reader will find relating to one and all.
Merits:
The feelings of a shy and introvert teenage girl which she endures for a senior student of her college have been put forward in an unabated flow.
Lines I liked:
"She was my treasure box in which I could endure all my secrets knowing that they will remain safe."
Demerits:
However the flow of the story is smooth, long paragraphs and lack of dialogues kill the enjoyment of reading. Enough work is required on maintaining the narration-conversation-balance. Moreover, the story is so simple without nil twists and turns that the reader develops an apathy towards the end.
Anyways, some stories are really so simple!
The tag line of the story suggests some flaw in the boy, the title suggests that he's flawless. Both are antagonizing to each other. And even after reading the story a couple of times I failed to spot the flaw in the boy. Perhaps the flaw was in the girl as I could understand from the tagline which has become quite ambiguous while trying to write a catchy one. I, with due apology, would like to suggest the writer to refrain from making such ambiguous headings.
The story is all about the memoirs of the girl, in the first person, not of the boy. It needs to be corrected as at present it is confusing.
Ratings : 2.5/5
Shagun Kesar is quite a young writer and expecting a flawless write-up from her will not be justified. Moreover, nobody is perfect either. She has great potential and has to go a long way.
Best of luck!
Rajeev Pundir
When the age of adolescence is overwhelmed by sex hormones, either in a male or in a female, they are supposed to be attracted towards their opposites. And that is so natural that we all had had an experience of this during our teenage while in school. Yet, not all of us are capable to describe our crush in the form of a story. And I would like to congratulate Shagun Kesar for penning a story which the reader will find relating to one and all.
Merits:
The feelings of a shy and introvert teenage girl which she endures for a senior student of her college have been put forward in an unabated flow.
Lines I liked:
"She was my treasure box in which I could endure all my secrets knowing that they will remain safe."
Demerits:
However the flow of the story is smooth, long paragraphs and lack of dialogues kill the enjoyment of reading. Enough work is required on maintaining the narration-conversation-balance. Moreover, the story is so simple without nil twists and turns that the reader develops an apathy towards the end.
Anyways, some stories are really so simple!
The tag line of the story suggests some flaw in the boy, the title suggests that he's flawless. Both are antagonizing to each other. And even after reading the story a couple of times I failed to spot the flaw in the boy. Perhaps the flaw was in the girl as I could understand from the tagline which has become quite ambiguous while trying to write a catchy one. I, with due apology, would like to suggest the writer to refrain from making such ambiguous headings.
The story is all about the memoirs of the girl, in the first person, not of the boy. It needs to be corrected as at present it is confusing.
Shagun Kesar is quite a young writer and expecting a flawless write-up from her will not be justified. Moreover, nobody is perfect either. She has great potential and has to go a long way.
Best of luck!
Rajeev Pundir
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