Review
This is a story of two students Rhea and Rudraksh studying as junior and senior in the same school.
Slowly they develop a liking for each other which changes into crush and later on into love. Rudraksh writes a love letter to her to express his feelings for her. Read the story to know what happens when she reads his love letter.
Merits:
It was almost a treat to read this story written by a girl Ashquanda Iqbal we hardly find around us as young as studying in class XII. The characters have been developed according to their nature and the story flows with lucidity maintaining the curiosity for the reader.
The line I liked: "And then, when our eyes met, it was the most glorious micro second of my life."
Demerits:
To tell about demerits of a write-up doesn't mean to discourage the writer but improve. Ashquanda is too young to be perfect and has a tremendous capacity to become an accomplished writer. Although she has tried her best, she has to improve a lot. First, the love letter in itself is too long and I think it could have been shortened using more effective emotions and powerful sentences for the same message a lover wants to convey to his beloved. Anything which is expressed in detail more than it's required shows lack of confidence in the lover.
In the very first paragraph, there is a flaw. This flaw pertains to the imagination of the writer's tender age and I hope her to improve with her maturity. The flaw is: twinkling of stars perfectly in a cloudy or sparsely cloudy sky after two hours of heavy rains. These two situations are antagonistic and do not occur altogether. Either you see one or the other.
Then there's is inappropriate use of certain words like- eyes dropped, confronting you and smirked. I suggest her to consult the dictionary before using the words to convey the correct meaning of that particular emotion and action.
Ratings: 2.5/5
I wish all the best for Ashquanda for her literary endeavor as she has a big potential as a writer.
Rajeev Pundir
This is a story of two students Rhea and Rudraksh studying as junior and senior in the same school.
Slowly they develop a liking for each other which changes into crush and later on into love. Rudraksh writes a love letter to her to express his feelings for her. Read the story to know what happens when she reads his love letter.
Merits:
It was almost a treat to read this story written by a girl Ashquanda Iqbal we hardly find around us as young as studying in class XII. The characters have been developed according to their nature and the story flows with lucidity maintaining the curiosity for the reader.
The line I liked: "And then, when our eyes met, it was the most glorious micro second of my life."
Demerits:
To tell about demerits of a write-up doesn't mean to discourage the writer but improve. Ashquanda is too young to be perfect and has a tremendous capacity to become an accomplished writer. Although she has tried her best, she has to improve a lot. First, the love letter in itself is too long and I think it could have been shortened using more effective emotions and powerful sentences for the same message a lover wants to convey to his beloved. Anything which is expressed in detail more than it's required shows lack of confidence in the lover.
In the very first paragraph, there is a flaw. This flaw pertains to the imagination of the writer's tender age and I hope her to improve with her maturity. The flaw is: twinkling of stars perfectly in a cloudy or sparsely cloudy sky after two hours of heavy rains. These two situations are antagonistic and do not occur altogether. Either you see one or the other.
Then there's is inappropriate use of certain words like- eyes dropped, confronting you and smirked. I suggest her to consult the dictionary before using the words to convey the correct meaning of that particular emotion and action.
Ratings: 2.5/5
I wish all the best for Ashquanda for her literary endeavor as she has a big potential as a writer.
Rajeev Pundir
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